I love this piece of writing Te Waipuke, especially at a time when I can't visit the beach. I like that you have used a simile to help add more detail. Remember to write a learning story to go with it. What were you learning to do? What was your task, how did you find it? Why?
Kia ora Te Waipuke, I really like this piece of writing. It reminds me of what it feels like to be at the beach playing in the warm sun. I can also imagine my feet in the cool water and the waves splashing on me. Your piece of writing took my mind to the beach so thank you. I can't wait to read more of your writing. Whaea Cara.
I love this piece of writing Te Waipuke, especially at a time when I can't visit the beach. I like that you have used a simile to help add more detail. Remember to write a learning story to go with it. What were you learning to do? What was your task, how did you find it? Why?
ReplyDeleteKia ora Te Waipuke,
ReplyDeleteI really like this piece of writing. It reminds me of what it feels like to be at the beach playing in the warm sun. I can also imagine my feet in the cool water and the waves splashing on me. Your piece of writing took my mind to the beach so thank you. I can't wait to read more of your writing.
Whaea Cara.